Night Mistress

I think this is pretty good for your first time writing romance. i like your details. i think you should really continue because you have a very good plot here. ...

okay, where is this story going? are you going to post another piece? Who is the narrator? what does she look like? what does mean "i'll be dead in three ...

Okay, this story. it's going back and forward between the past and the future, right? because it's getting a little confused. my advice: switch with one and make it work. ...

ummm...its seem kind of rushed to me for some odd reason. maybe slow down the reunited of cain and Eve a bit, explain it a bit more. I dunno. i ...

um.....interesting. i getting the feeling that things are going to get more complicate to Spohia. and MIcheal...does he have a crush on her or something? i guess i will have ...

so she went on with her life. that's good. I really thought she was going to commit suicide so she could be with Adam. I kind of wish that he ...

wow! this is getting pretty deep. i can't help but wonder what she is going to do now that Ada is gone. is she going to go on in her ...

oh god. i feel so sorry for your MC now. my stomach twisted as i read the line "valerie, Adam is dead." it made me want to cry. i see ...

re-read through you work. you got a couple of mistakes. like dead blood red roses. make sure if you use more than one adjective, use commas or it will just ...

Wow! i could pratically feel the emotion coming off of this chapter. the one thing that puzzles me : why is Carmen pushing Issac to Sohpia? I get the feeling ...

so, i take it, the boy lost his memories somehow and the girl, Lily is going to care for him until his memory return. is that right? it's seems interesting. ...

Wow! I am still knida of sore on Carmen 's and Nora's relationship. Something bad is going to happen to Sohpia. I can feelt it, and then Carmen and Nora ...

hey, sorry i haven't been not. Sophia and Issac are getting pretty deep, aren't they? um...i have a feel that the covenant is going to like that. I hope you ...

whoa! talk about a difference. so wait! carmen now approves of Issac. This is getting wierd, yet interesting. I wonder...nah, i better keep that to myself and just see what ...

I am sad for Sophia now. I hope she will get happy soon. In this chapter, I got a sense of foreboding in this chapter because of the prologue. Sophia ...